I'm going to have to go back to read all your other stories with these guys. You did a great job balancing out the different POVs and keeping the action moving through the dialog. Aaaaand your dialog is great. So yeah, really enjoyed this.
Think this was my favorite exchange: "...We'll find out where his guards spend their off duty hours."
"They might all be Gamorreans."
"There's still pleasant conversation and strategically losing at dice."
Heh, I can completely hear the Agent and Kaliyo saying that.
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Date: 2012-11-19 11:40 pm (UTC)Think this was my favorite exchange:
"...We'll find out where his guards spend their off duty hours."
"They might all be Gamorreans."
"There's still pleasant conversation and strategically losing at dice."
Heh, I can completely hear the Agent and Kaliyo saying that.